Paper A

1. The HCG Diet does not have lasting results.

2. The audience are obese Americans who are interested in the HCG diet as a method to lose weight.

3. The goal of this paper is to convince the audience that the HCG diet is not practical because in the long run it does not keep weight off.

4. Logos: This paper uses facts and statistics to support its claim that the HCG diet does not keep weight off. One example are the percentages of how many people gained weight back after participating in the HCG diet. Presenting scientific evidence as support appeals to the logical side of an argument.

Ethos: Readers of this paper would find it very easy to trust the evidence presented because it is provided by doctors. Doctors and scientists have high credibility. Using their testimonies as support in the paper strengthens the argument, and gains the trust of the audience.

Sufficient: This paper has too many reasons to support the topic. In order to make the paper more efficient and persuasive, rather then informative, only one reason should be focused on in the claim.  Providing two many reasons and too much information can make the paper look unorganized. If the claim was limited to one reason then the paper would be easier for the audience to understand.

Accurate: The information provided as support in the paper is accurate because all of the sources are credible, but some of the information contradicts itself. One sentence claims that the Doctor who created the HCG diet does not state how many years he follows up with patient relapse, while another sentence in the same paragraph does. This makes the paper look like the information it is using is faulty. In order to fix this problem the accuracy of the evidence used needs to be checked.

5. Overall this paper has good reasons and evidence as to why the HCG diet does not keep off weight, but could be organized in a different manner to better achieve its goal. Right now the paper might grasp the attention of its audience but not convince them to stay clear of the HCG diet. To improve this paper one claim, opposed to two, needs to be developed.

word count: 372